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Wires crisscorss, one becomes two
A fissure of mind, I wont rely on you

Things that I love, the other one hates
Im quick to help, but the other debates

Switching my smile, Its you ive decieved
Afraid of the world, my anger concieved

Crying inside, while the other one jeers
Fist clenched in rage, concealing my tears

Isolate my strength, and I become weak
Soul split apart, the future is bleak

my ritual laugh, shadows creep near
I can endure no more, the other is here
©2003-2009 ~Demonbane
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How I feel about myself

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:icontaccan:
wow! I LOVE IT!
:icontoby-triksel:
Ah...NICE...

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Live every day as if it were your last...
Because one day... it will be.

Toby
:iconhic-et-ubique:
oOoo...love the ending. great ending. awesome ending...yep...love the last 4 words. whooooo! heh. yay for words...yay.
:iconmysteriousphoenix:
that is simply amazing, i love that you kept to the rhyme throughout i always find that's so hard to while keeping the emotional energy up but you did it really well

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-- A path out into the green, footworn and calm, no end, no destination. Just the walk.--
:iconmegalithic:
You already know that I love this piece so there's not much point in me blabbing on. But still!!!!!
I really -do- like how it ends, very creepy and mysterious.

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Remember friend as you pass by
As you are now so once was I
As I am now you soon shall be
So prepare for death and follow me.
:iconyaminokaze:
I am totally thinking of Xenogears right now ^_^

This really is excellent, though. I like it a lot :)

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:iconsilent-screamer:
wow ... I'm really impressed.

My fave part is:
"Crying inside, while the other one jeers
Fist clenched in rage, concealing my tears"

This really speaks to me :)
:icondemonbane:
Its about inner conflict... feeling like different people.
is that what you got out of it? i want to know if MY idea got across.

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